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[–]FlippyKing 1 insightful - 2 fun1 insightful - 1 fun2 insightful - 2 fun -  (1 child)

this is not a script, it's not a beat sheet, it's a disorganized mess. Following industry-standard script formatting standards allows readers to read the script more quickly and even estimate run time from the number of pages.

Please reformat it properly, but include at the top a logline so I know if I would even want to read it.

[–]timothy_bellette[S] 1 insightful - 2 fun1 insightful - 1 fun2 insightful - 2 fun -  (0 children)

The rest of the show writes itself! Grow an imagination!

[–][deleted] 1 insightful - 1 fun1 insightful - 0 fun2 insightful - 1 fun -  (0 children)

Never mind FlippyKing. Should be a fun sitcom in due course. Include dialogue, starting with the name of each character. Simplify the plot. Focus the attention on a main goal. See here: