I wrote this by Musky's request. This is only my second attempt at song writing (the first one being this rap). It's slightly awkward: I'm not a singer but simply doing this as part of a poetic endeavour.
How to communicate how it's sung? I'm using italics to denote where the emphasis lies. This is a slow and cheesy song with long lines. If the emphasis lies in the middle of a line, the rest should be sung after a short break. The refrain emphasizes "try", "all", and "time" individually, so those lines are very slow. Finally: to get a feel for the style, listen to this song.
Enjoy.
I know there's better selves I could be
I'm not quite the man you wish to see
Through the years my attititude has changed
And I'm partially to be blamed
Everything exploded just last week
Things had really reached a peak
Now you ask: "is this the only game?
Are things always gonna be the same?"
But honey don't you know
I try all the time!
From the bottom of my heart
I want to make another start
I try all the time!
I want to be a better man
Give it the best effort I can
I try, honey
I try!
I hit the bottom of the bottle
And then hurry to grab another
Too many spirits have been drunk
But my mood's not lifted, it has sunk
Things had spiraled out of control
When you found me wasted on a knoll
Now I promise I will stop
Won't swallow even one more drop
I try all the time!
You won't see me drunk anymore
Gonna be sober to a bore
Truly, I try all the time!
This is not a big pretence
I really hope we'll make amends
I try, honey
Don't you see that I try!
I see this ring and seek a way to say
It seems we wedded only yesterday
But a lot has happened in between
Marriage isn't what it seemed
Now we're stranded on this shore
And you can't stand me anymore
But I have started to shift the gear
And the old days might reappear
I try all the time!
This marriage will reach another spring
You'll remember the day I gave you my ring
Oh yes, I try all the time!
It's not too late to make things right
There'll be a turning of the tide
I try, honey
And you will see that I try!
Recall how I asked you to be mine
And your response sounded like a chime
You said "yes" without a second thought
And accepted the precious ring I bought
That choice has led us through thick and thin
We revealed virtue as well as sin
Now I'm posing another question
Will you join me in taking action?
Let's try one more time!
Strike through the days that lie in the past
And mark this day as something fresh
Honey, let's try one more time!
We have mere decades more to spend
Come on, let's make it something grand
Let's try one more time!
Oh please, let's try one more time!
Let's try, honey
Let's try!
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